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2.0/ 5
DevelopingPartially Successful
The response articulates a clear stance against the expansion of GMOs, but lacks depth in elaboration and specific examples. Frequent grammatical errors hinder clarity, and the engagement with classmates is minimal, which affects the overall effectiveness of the argument.
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Content
3/5Breakdown
Clear purpose3/5
Complete response3/5
Addresses requirements3/5
Working well
- Acknowledges potential risks — “the irresponsible expansion might have a negative impact on our food security rather than tackling the food insecurity due to potential loss of biodiversity.”
- Provides an example — “For example, the bananas nowadays have great population, yet are still at the edge of extinct because they have almost identical genes.”
- Clear conclusion — “To sum up, I am not in favor of the irresponsible expansion of GMOs due to the potential risk that stemmed from inevitable biodiversity loss.”
To improve
- Vague elaboration Try: Specify what these advantages are and how they might lead to a loss of biodiversity.
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