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2.0/ 5
DevelopingPartially Successful
The response articulates a clear opinion on professional achievement but lacks specific examples and deeper engagement with classmates' ideas. Additionally, there are several grammatical errors that detract from clarity and coherence.
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Content
3/5Breakdown
Clear purpose3/5
Complete response3/5
Addresses requirements3/5
Working well
- Acknowledgment of Counterarguments — “Althogh some people argue that it has drawback.”
- Use of Personal Example — “For example, my cousin followed his consistent goals and achieved them, which helped him become more adaptable and find stable jobs with good salaries.”
To improve
- Vague Elaboration Try: Despite these concerns, I believe that professional achievement offers numerous advantages such as financial stability, career growth, and personal satisfaction.
- Lack of Specificity Try: I strongly agree with Student 2's perspective that achievements provide students with opportunities for career advancement and personal development, contributing to long-term well-being.
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