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2.0/ 5
DevelopingLimited to Partial Success
The response presents a relevant opinion on privacy but lacks sufficient elaboration and specificity in examples. Frequent grammatical errors and limited syntactic variety significantly detract from the overall clarity and effectiveness of the argument.
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Basic
Content
2.5/5Breakdown
Clear purpose2.5/5
Complete response2.5/5
Addresses requirements2.5/5
Working well
- Clear stance on privacy — “I strongly believe that privacy is important in today society, the benefit of connection and sharing does not worth the potential risks,”
- Relevance to modern society — “the value of connection and community that social media provides is incredibly beneficial in our modern society.”
To improve
- Lack of specificity in examples Try: Provide a more specific example or statistic, such as 'A recent survey in Morocco found that 60% of social media users experienced negative consequences from oversharing.'
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