Back to SamplesAcademic Discussion — Sample
2.0/ 5
DevelopingPartially Successful
The response addresses the topic and provides a clear stance, but it suffers from vague examples and significant grammatical errors. The lack of engagement with classmates' ideas and limited syntactic variety further detracts from the overall effectiveness of the argument.
14 / 30
Basic
Content
3/5Breakdown
Clear purpose3/5
Complete response3/5
Addresses requirements3/5
Working well
- Acknowledges different viewpoints — “While I appreciate the points made by both students,”
- Provides a real-world example — “For example, in Japan, famous bank leaked customers' personal information due to a system failure.”
- Clear stance on the issue — “Therefore, my opinion remains that people definitely think individuals should be more concerned about their privacy online.”
To improve
- Vague reasoning Try: This is because systems managed by social media companies can fail unexpectedly, leading to potential privacy breaches.
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