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The response effectively addresses the importance of privacy in social media, showing a clear opinion. However, it suffers from vague examples and grammatical errors that hinder its overall clarity and effectiveness.
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Content
3.5/5Breakdown
Clear purpose3.5/5
Complete response3.5/5
Addresses requirements3.5/5
Working well
- Clear opinion — “In my opinion, confidentiality is the most essential aspect of social media.”
- Acknowledgment of opposing view — “While Student 2 raised a relevant point about the importance of connectivity and how these platforms allow them, I believe she is missing the critical idea of secrecy.”
- Emphasis on privacy risks — “For example, if a person who is an active user uploads about their day-to-day practices, he/she will be victim to targeted avertising and also be vulnerable to data brokers who sell their information.”
To improve
- Vague examples Try: Provide specific examples of how targeted advertising and data brokering can negatively impact individuals, such as identity theft or unwanted solicitation.
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