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The response effectively states a position on privacy in social media, but it lacks depth and specific examples to support the argument. Additionally, there are several grammatical errors that detract from the overall clarity of the response.
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Basic
Content
3/5Breakdown
Clear purpose3/5
Complete response3/5
Addresses requirements3/5
Working well
- Clear opinion on privacy — “In my opinion, confidentiality is the most important aspect of social media.”
- Acknowledgement of opposing view — “While Student 2 raised a relevant point about the importance of connectivity and how these platforms allow them, I believe she is missing the critical idea of privacy.”
- Emphasis on safety — “staying connected is crucial but we cannot do that at the cost of our safety.”
To improve
- Vague elaboration Try: we should avoid sharing sensitive information such as our home address, financial details, and personal identification numbers.
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