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2.0/ 5
DevelopingPartially Successful
The response articulates a relevant concern about online privacy, particularly for children, but lacks specific examples to support its claims. There are multiple grammatical errors that hinder understanding, and the engagement with classmates is minimal.
14 / 30
Basic
Content
3/5Breakdown
Clear purpose3/5
Complete response3/5
Addresses requirements3/5
Working well
- Acknowledgement of Risks — “it is extremely unsafe for children under 18-year-old to make friends online”
- Parental Responsibility — “parents should intensify their monitor of children's phone, by setting time limits or privacy protection”
To improve
- Vague Elaboration Try: Provide a clearer example or explanation of how adults might exploit children on platforms like Roblox.
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