Back to SamplesAcademic Discussion — Sample
2.0/ 5
DevelopingPartially Successful
The response effectively addresses the topic and engages with classmates, but it lacks specific examples to strengthen the argument. Additionally, grammatical errors and limited syntactic variety hinder the overall clarity and effectiveness of the response.
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Basic
Content
3.5/5Breakdown
Clear purpose3.5/5
Complete response3.5/5
Addresses requirements3.5/5
Working well
- Acknowledges opposing views — “I agree with Student 1 that people should be more concerned about online privacy, although I also understand Student 2’s point about the value of connection.”
- Highlights potential risks — “Even a harmless photo, location update, or personal comment may later be seemed by employers, schools, or strangers.”
- Mentions data collection — “privacy settings do not always provide complete protection as companies may still collect behavioral data in the background to manipulate the citizens.”
To improve
- Lack of specificity in examples Try: Provide a specific example of a social media platform where this occurs, such as Facebook or Instagram, to strengthen the argument.
- Incomplete conclusion Try: Complete the sentence by suggesting specific actions users can take, such as 'and regularly updating privacy settings to enhance security.'
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