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2.0/ 5
DevelopingPartially Successful
The response effectively addresses the importance of privacy in social media, showing a clear opinion and some engagement with a peer's argument. However, it suffers from grammatical errors and a lack of specific examples, which detracts from the overall clarity and depth of the argument.
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Content
3.5/5Breakdown
Clear purpose3.5/5
Complete response3.5/5
Addresses requirements3.5/5
Working well
- Clear opinion — “In my opinion, privacy is the most important aspect of social media.”
- Acknowledgement of opposing view — “While Student 2 raised a relevant point about the importance of connectivity and how these platforms allow them, I believe she is missing the critical idea of privacy.”
- Emphasis on security — “staying connected is crucial but we cannot do that at the cost of our security.”
To improve
- Vague elaboration Try: Provide a specific example or scenario to illustrate how sharing personal details can lead to targeted advertising and hacking.
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