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DevelopingPartially Successful
The response articulates a clear stance on the dangers of social media regarding privacy, but it lacks specific examples to support the argument. Additionally, grammatical errors and limited syntactic variety hinder the overall clarity and effectiveness of the response.
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Content
3/5Breakdown
Clear purpose3/5
Complete response3/5
Addresses requirements3/5
Working well
- Understanding of Risks — “Therefore, I can understand the concern of Student 1 regarding the well-use of personal data.”
- Acknowledgment of Data Storage — “new social media are storing more personal and social information.”
To improve
- Lack of Specific Examples Try: Provide specific examples or case studies where personal data was compromised due to social media use to strengthen the argument.
- Conclusion Clarity Try: Rephrase to: 'In conclusion, the potential drawbacks significantly outweigh the benefits, as social media continues to store more data without users' knowledge.'
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