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DevelopingPartially Successful

The response effectively argues for the importance of studying history but lacks specific examples and deeper engagement with classmates' ideas. Grammatical errors and limited syntactic variety detract from the overall clarity and effectiveness of the argument.

14 / 30

Basic

Content

3.5/5

Breakdown

Clear purpose3.5/5
Complete response3.5/5
Addresses requirements3.5/5

Working well

  • Acknowledgment of history's role — “I firmly believe that is fundamental to know the past actions to understand the actual context of world.
  • Illustrative example — “By way of illustration, the ceo of the Eztec, a real state company,ignored past actions that jeopardized the business and bought a site to construct a high-end building in a middle class neibourhood, resulting in an enourmous sales problem.
  • Conclusion restates main idea — “Ultimately, for the reasons outlined above, it is reasonable to conclude that history is significant to understand current events.

To improve

  • Vague example Try: Provide more details about the specific historical actions ignored and how they directly relate to the sales problem to strengthen the argument.

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