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3.0/ 5
FairPartially Successful
The email fulfills the basic requirements but suffers from several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that hinder clarity. While the tone is polite and there is a clear intent, the overall language quality needs improvement.
19 / 30
Intermediate
Content
3/5Breakdown
Clear purpose3/5
Complete response3/5
Addresses requirements3/5
Working well
- Clear Request for Assistance — “I kindly ask you for your help, about your policy changing.”
- Mention of Purchase Details — “I bought the book for enivornmental sciens edition No 6, author Bizmark and others, based on inputs of my Professor.”
- Timely Mention of Return Policy — “Furthermore, today is 6th day since my shoping day.”
To improve
- Lack of Clarity in Request Try: Considering all these facts, I would appreciate your guidance on how to proceed with the return process and the expected timeline for a refund.
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