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FairPartially Successful

The email effectively communicates the main issues with the treadmills but lacks specific details and clarity. There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrases that hinder understanding.

19 / 30

Intermediate

Content

2.5/5

Breakdown

Clear purpose2.5/5
Complete response2.5/5
Addresses requirements2.5/5

Working well

  • Clear identification — “I am Jinho Yoon
  • Direct request — “Would you notice me where the button is or could you send me some pictures of it?

To improve

  • Lack of elaboration on issues Try: Provide specific examples of how the treadmills are difficult to use, such as mentioning any error messages or specific malfunctions.
  • Confusing statement Try: Clarify that the gym purchased the treadmills, not the writer, to avoid confusion.

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