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The email addresses the heating problem but lacks detail and clarity. Frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing significantly impact the overall effectiveness of the communication.

14 / 30

Basic

Content

2/5

Breakdown

Clear purpose2/5
Complete response2/5
Addresses requirements2/5

Working well

  • Clear identification of the problem — “the heating system is not working properly
  • Quantitative details provided — “the temp of the heating system should be 30 degrees but it only givine 18
  • Request for timeline — “i would like to know a specific timeline for repairs.

To improve

  • Lack of detail about personal impact Try: Furthermore, the low temperatures at night make it difficult for me to sleep comfortably, affecting my daily routine.
  • Missing request for temporary solutions Try: Could you also suggest any temporary solutions to keep the apartment warm until the repairs are completed?

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