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The email effectively communicates the inquiry about the scholarship status and maintains a polite tone. However, it contains several grammatical errors and lacks variety in sentence structure, which detracts from its overall quality.

22 / 30

Intermediate

Content

3.5/5

Breakdown

Clear purpose3.5/5
Complete response3.5/5
Addresses requirements3.5/5

Working well

  • Clear identification — “My name is Jinho Yoon and I applied for a merit-based scholarship three weeks ago.
  • Clear call to action — “Therefore, could you tell me about the timeline for decisions?

To improve

  • Lack of elaboration Try: I am writing to inquire about the status of my scholarship application and to understand when I might expect to receive a decision.
  • Unnecessary personal details Try: Remove this sentence unless specifically requested, as it does not contribute to the main purpose of the email.

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