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3.5/ 5
GoodPartially Successful
The email effectively communicates the heating issue and its effects, demonstrating adequate elaboration. However, there are noticeable grammatical errors and a lack of syntactic variety that hinder clarity.
22 / 30
Intermediate
Content
4/5Breakdown
Clear purpose4/5
Complete response4/5
Addresses requirements4/5
Working well
- Detailed description of the problem — “Recently, you noticed that the heating system is not working properly, and the temperature in your apartment drops significantly at night.”
- Explanation of the impact — “The issue is affecting you; the temperature in your apartment drops significantly at night.”
- Clear request for a timeline — “Request a specific timeline for repairs”
To improve
- Lack of syntactic variety Try: Consider using varied sentence structures, such as: 'At night, the temperature plummets, making the apartment uncomfortably cold.'
- Imprecise language Try: Use more precise language, such as: 'Could you please provide a specific date by which the repairs will be completed?'
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