Strong response
Band 5.04.0/5 rubricI understand Student 2’s point about the importance of making profits, but I agree more with Student 1. Businesses should prioritize social and environmental responsibility because it benefits both society and the company in the long run. When a company reduces pollution and supports its local community, it builds trust among customers. As a result, more people are likely to choose its products and remain loyal to the brand. For example, many consumers today prefer businesses that use recyclable packaging or participate in community projects. These responsible actions improve the company’s reputation while also protecting the environment. Therefore, I believe businesses can achieve lasting success by focusing on social and environmental responsibility rather than only maximizing profits.
What worked
- Clear position
- Use of relevant examples
- Logical reasoning
What cost points
- Limited engagement with classmates' ideas
- Repetitive language