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FairMostly Unsuccessful

This email attempts to convey issues with new gym equipment but is hindered by frequent grammatical errors and limited vocabulary. While the message is understandable, the language accuracy and syntactic variety need significant improvement.

16 / 30

Basic

Content

2.5/5

Breakdown

Clear purpose2.5/5
Complete response2.5/5
Addresses requirements2.5/5

Working well

  • Attempts to provide specific examples of issues — “In the first day the display was not working and I could not to set my train. In the second day I got use a treadmill for 10 minutes and after that it stoped and did not want to work more. In the last day I tried to use, but none of them would not turn on.
  • Clearly states a request for action — “I would like to request a maintenence for the treadmills if possible.

To improve

  • Lack of detail regarding the impact on workout routine Try: I was unable to set my workout program, which significantly disrupted my routine.

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