Write an Email prompt

Summer Internship Inquiry - Environmental Studies Student

Name: Reach120
Author: Reach120

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The prompt

As it appears in practice

A local environmental organization is offering summer internships. You are passionate about environmental conservation and want to apply. You need to write an initial email to express your interest and ask about the application process.

What the response has to do

Express your interest in environmental conservation
Briefly describe relevant experience or coursework
Ask about the internship responsibilities
Inquire about the application requirements and deadline

Sample answers, by band

3 published

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Middle response

Band 4.53.5/5 rubric

To: [email protected]
Subject: Summer Internship Inquiry - Environmental Studies Student

Dear RH team, I hope you're doing well. I would like to share my real interest in environmental conservation. Since I was 4 years old, I already helped my family to separate our trash into recyclables and organic.This is because I think we can build a better world in the future. My bachelor's degree was in climate change and I have a major in environmental policy. In addition, I've been working in a climatech company as an intern. Moreover, I would like to know more about three things, which are: - Internship responsabilities. - Application requirements. - Deadline of the application Sincerely, [name withheld]

What worked

Expression of interest
Relevant experience
Educational background

What cost points

Lack of specificity
Repetitive structure

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Middle response

Band 4.53.5/5 rubric

To: [email protected]
Subject: Summer Internship Inquiry - Environmental Studies Student

Dear administrator, Good morning. I hope this email finds you well. I am writing to express my interest in the summer internship offered by the local environmental organization. I am passionate about ecological conservation. My major is focusing on saving habitis and how to restore the ecosystems. I volunteered before to plant trees to reduce carbon emission and mitigate the climate change. Could you please inform me about the specific details of the application process especially if there is any requirements? Additionally, would it be posssible to tell me the exact deadline? Thanks for your time and consideration. I look forward to your reply at your earliest convenience. Best regards, [name withheld]

What worked

Expresses interest
Relevant experience
Professional tone

What cost points

Spelling error
Lack of detail in coursework

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Middle response

Band 4.53.5/5 rubric

To: [email protected]
Subject: Summer Internship Inquiry - Environmental Studies Student

I am writing this email regarding the summer internships. I have to say that I am really interested in that project because I have a big passion for our habitat. As a vet, I would like to participate in this summer event. Also, I have to say that I have been participating in these kinds of projects for several years. For example, there was an event about recycling last summer, where I was an intern. Furthermore, I would like to ask you about duties and possible assignments for this important internship. Finally, I would like to ask you about the requirements to collaborate with you. It will be great if you share that information with me, and the deadlines. Thank you for your time and dedication. Sincerely [name withheld]