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Inquiry about Summer 2024 Internship Application Requirements

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The prompt

As it appears in practice

You are a third-year computer science student at Greenfield University and are interested in applying for a software development internship at Tech Innovations Inc. The internship is scheduled to start in the summer of 2024. You found the position listed on your university's career services website, but the application details were unclear. You want to ensure you have all necessary documents before the application deadline on January 15, 2024. You decide to email the HR manager, Lisa Tran, to clarify the application requirements.

What the response has to do

Ask about the specific documents required for the application (resume, cover letter, transcripts, etc.)
Inquire if there are any preferred programming languages or skills for the internship
Request information on how to submit the application documents

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Strong response

Band 5.04.0/5 rubric

To: [email protected]
Subject: Inquiry about Summer 2024 Internship Application Requirements

Dear Lisa Tran, I hope this message finds you well, My name is [name withheld], and I am studying Computer Science at Greenfield University. I am eager to apply for an internship at Tech Innovations Inc and I would like to inquire about which specific documents are required for the application. Additionally, I would appreciate it if you could inform me about any preferred programming languages or technical skills, as I have experience in several programming languages. Finally, I would be grateful if you could provide more information regarding the enrollment procedure. Sincerely, [name withheld]

What worked

Clear purpose
Polite tone
Gratitude expression

What cost points

Lack of specific request
Missing article

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Strong response

Band 5.04.0/5 rubric

To: [email protected]
Subject: Inquiry about Summer 2024 Internship Application Requirements

Dear Ms. Tran, I hope this email finds you well. My name is [name withheld], and I am a third-year computer science student at Greenfield University. I am writing to ask about the internship, especially I would like to inquire about the specific documents required for submission, such as a resume, cover letter, and transcripts. In addition, I am eager to learn more about any preferred programming languages or skills for the internship. Could you please clarify how to submit the application documents? I greatly appreciate your assistance. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to your response at your earliest convenience. Best regards, [name withheld]

What worked

Professional tone
Clear purpose
Expresses gratitude

What cost points

Sentence structure
Lack of syntactic variety

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Middle response

Band 4.53.5/5 rubric

To: [email protected]
Subject: Inquiry about Summer 2024 Internship Application Requirements

Dear manager I hope this email finds you well. My name is [name withheld] and I am a third-year computer science studet at Greenfield University. I am writing to ask about internship, especialy I would like to inquire about the specific documents required for the application, such as resume, cover letter, and transcripts. In addition, I want to know that if there are any preferred programming langages or skill for the internship. I greatly appreciate it if you provide information on how to submit the apllication documents. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to your response at your earliest convenience. Best regards, [name withheld]