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Inquiry about Summer 2024 Internship Application Details

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The prompt

As it appears in practice

You are a junior at Riverdale University majoring in Environmental Science. You recently attended a career fair where you met Ms. Clara Thompson, the internship coordinator for Green Earth Initiatives, a non-profit organization focused on sustainable urban development. You are interested in applying for their Summer 2024 internship program. The application deadline is approaching on March 15, 2024, and you want to ensure you meet all the necessary requirements. You remember Ms. Thompson mentioning something about a specific project proposal that needs to be included with the application, but you are not sure about the details.

What the response has to do

Ask for clarification on the project proposal requirement for the internship application.
Inquire if there are any specific documents or forms needed along with the application.
Confirm the submission deadline and where to send the application materials.

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Middle response

Band 4.53.5/5 rubric

To: clara.thompson@greenearth.org
Subject: Inquiry about Summer 2024 Internship Application Details

Dear Ms. Clara Thompson I am writing this email regarding your Summer internship program, which is upcoming. I would like to inform you that I am really interested to collaborate with you in this program. Therefore, I would like to ask you some questions about this position. First of all, could you please confirm what is the project proposal, which is a requirement for this position? Also, I would like to know if there is other specific document or form that I will need to submit with my application. Finally, I will try to meet all these requirements before the application deadline on March 15, 2024. Thank you so much for your dedication and time. Best regards [name withheld]

What worked

Professional tone
Clear purpose
Specific inquiry

What cost points

Awkward phrasing
Lack of elaboration

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Middle response

Band 4.03.0/5 rubric

To: clara.thompson@greenearth.org
Subject: Inquiry about Summer 2024 Internship Application Details

Dear Ms Thompson, I recently met you on career fair as junior student at Riverdale University. I am an environmental science major and I am very eager to apply for your summer 2024 internship program. I would like to know what are the the requirements for this application. I also remember you mentioning a specific project related to this but unfortunately I cant recall all the details of that proposal. I would like to request if you could clarify the research needs and the necessary qualifications and the documents i have to submit to be granted a chance at this internship. I know the submission deadline is March 15, 2024 so i would appreciate it if you could get b ack to me at your earliest convience so i could apply timely sincerely [name withheld]

What worked

Clear expression of interest
Acknowledgment of prior interaction
Polite request for information

What cost points

Lack of specificity in request
Grammatical errors affecting clarity

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Foundation response

Band 3.52.5/5 rubric

To: clara.thompson@greenearth.org
Subject: Inquiry about Summer 2024 Internship Application Details

Dear Clara Thompson, I hope this message finds you well, I am writing to inquire about the internship application requirements and specific responsibilities. Moreover,I would be grateful if you could provide further information about specific documents about the submission process. Additionally, what is deadline for the applictions and where should i send my documents. Sincerely, [name withheld]