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Membership Application Follow-up

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The prompt

As it appears in practice

You applied for a membership at the University Film Enthusiasts Club two weeks ago, but you have not received any confirmation or further instructions. The club is known for organizing bi-weekly film screenings and monthly discussions with guest directors. You are eager to participate in the upcoming film festival they are hosting in November. Your friend, Alex, who is a club member, mentioned that you should have heard back by now, so you decide to follow up on your application status.

What the response has to do

Politely inquire about the status of your membership application
Express your enthusiasm for participating in the upcoming film festival
Ask if there are any additional steps you need to complete for your membership

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Middle response

Band 4.53.5/5 rubric

To: membership@filmclub.university.edu
Subject: Membership Application Follow-up

I am writing this email regarding a membership at the University Film, which I applied two weeks ago. I have been checking my emails, but I cound not find any answers from you related to this process. Therefore, I would like to ask you for my application status. Also, I would wish to inform you that I am really interested in participating in the upcoming festival. Finally, could you please provide any additional steps I need to complete? I wanted to make sure that I am meeting all the requirements to complete this selection without mistakes. Thank you so much for your time and dedication. Best regards [name withheld]

What worked

Polite tone
Clear request for information
Expresses enthusiasm

What cost points

Grammatical error
Awkward phrasing

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Middle response

Band 4.03.0/5 rubric

To: membership@filmclub.university.edu
Subject: Membership Application Follow-up

Dear service team, I hope this message finds you well. I am writing to kindly inquire about the status of my membership application. I applied for membership in the University Film Enthusiasts Club two weeks ago; however, I have not received any confirmation yet. Additionally, I am eager to participating in the upcoming film festival in November and I am convinced that to gaining valuable hands-on experience will aid me for future long-term career. Finally, I would appreciate it if you could let me know whether I need to complete any additional steps. Once again, thank you for your time and consideration. Sincerely, [name withheld]