Write an Email prompt

Request for Pet Permission

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The prompt

As it appears in practice

You are Alex Chen, a graduate student at Crestwood University. You recently signed a one-year lease for an apartment located at 125 Maple Avenue, and the lease began on September 1st. You are considering adopting a small dog from the local shelter and would like to ensure it's allowed according to the lease agreement. Although the lease doesn't explicitly mention pets, you want to seek permission from your landlord, Mr. Robert Lee, in advance. You have also been attending weekly dog training classes to prepare for your new pet.

What the response has to do

Explain why you want to adopt a dog and how it will fit into your lifestyle.
Reassure your landlord about your commitment to maintaining the apartment's cleanliness.
Inquire if there are any specific requirements or additional fees related to having a pet.

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Middle response

Band 4.53.5/5 rubric

To: rlee_property@crestwoodrentals.com
Subject: Request for Pet Permission

Dear Mr. Lee, I hope this email finds you well. My name is [name withheld] and I am a graduate student at Crestwood University. I am writing to ask about the pet policy. I recently signed a one-year rental agreement for an apartment located at 125 Maple Avenue, and the contract began on September 1st. I really need life with my pet because I have been sick since I was a child. I am very comfortable with pets to treat my disease. Additionally, I have been attending weekly dog training classes to prepare for my new pet. I want to reassure you that I am committed to maintaining the apartment's cleanliness and ensuring that having a pet will not affect the condition of the property. Could you please let me know if there are any specific requirements or additional fees related to having a pet? Thank you for your understanding. Sincerely, [name withheld]

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Middle response

Band 4.53.5/5 rubric

To: rlee_property@crestwoodrentals.com
Subject: Request for Pet Permission

Dear Mr. Lee I am writing this email regarding some clarifications that I would like to get from you. First of all, this new apartment is amazing with a great view and space. I wanted to inform you that I adopted a dog last week, and I wanted to ask you if the building accepts pets because this was not mention in our contract. Furthermore, I have been attending some dog training classes to prepare my pet in order to keep my apartment clean. If I need any additional requirement please let me know. I wanted to inform you this change because I would like to follow all the instructions for this new apartment. Thank you for your time Best regards [name withheld]

What worked

Expresses appreciation for the apartment
Mentions attending dog training classes
Expresses willingness to comply with requirements

What cost points

Lack of specific details about lifestyle fit
Grammar and syntax errors

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Middle response

Band 4.03.0/5 rubric

To: rlee_property@crestwoodrentals.com
Subject: Request for Pet Permission

Dear Mr. Robert, I hope this email finds you well. I am writing to inform you regading a permission to have a pet in my apartment, since I am living alone for along time and want some company. I would like to assure you that I will maintain the apartment clean and organized as it was. Could you also kindly tell me if there any specific requirements or additional fees I should make for having a pet, so I could prepare myself accordingly. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward for your response. Sincerely, [name withheld]