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Inquiry about venue rental for March 15th

Name: Reach120
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The prompt

As it appears in practice

You are planning a team-building event for your university's environmental club and are considering renting a local event space called 'Green Haven Conference Center' located in your city. The event is scheduled for March 15th, 2024, and you expect around 30 participants. You need to find out their pricing for a half-day rental, check if the venue is available on that date, and inquire about any included amenities such as audio-visual equipment or catering options.

What the response has to do

Request information on the pricing for a half-day rental of the venue
Ask if the venue is available on March 15th, 2024
Inquire about any available amenities, such as audio-visual equipment or catering

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Middle response

Band 4.53.5/5 rubric

To: info@greenhavencc.com
Subject: Inquiry about venue rental for March 15th

Dear Manager, I hope you are doing well, I am writing to get information on the pricing of green haven conference center in which I am hosting a event for 30 participants on March 15 . I would like to know is the hall available on the date mentioned above or do we need to reschedule the event to another day. I would like to know this earlier so that I could take necessary steps to manage if the event is delayed till the end of the month. Furthermore, I would like to know about catering services available in the hall as we all are university students and we prefer projector for display and also audio system to engage the team members in meeting. I would appreciate if you could provide me details. Sincerely, [name withheld]

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Middle response

Band 4.03.0/5 rubric

To: info@greenhavencc.com
Subject: Inquiry about venue rental for March 15th

I am writing this email about an event for my university's rnvironmental club, which will take place in a few weeks. Therefore, we are considering renting your installations for March 15th. We will host around 30 participants. Therefore, I would like to obtain some information related the prices, specifically, for a half-day rental. Also, If the building is able that date. Finally, I am asking you, if your services included visual and audio equiment or catering. This is the most important event for our club, and we need to set everything in advanced. Thanks for considering, I look forward to hearing from you. Best regards, [name withheld]