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Lease Renewal Inquiry

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The prompt

As it appears in practice

You are Alex Smith, a graduate student at Greenfield University, currently living in an apartment at 123 Maple Street. Your lease is set to expire on June 30, 2023, and you are interested in renewing it for another year. You have been living there since July 2022 and have enjoyed the location due to its proximity to campus and local amenities. However, you are concerned about potential rent increases and would like to discuss this before making a decision.

What the response has to do

Inquire about the possibility of renewing the lease for another year
Ask if there will be any changes to the current rent amount
Request information on any updates or maintenance that may be scheduled for the upcoming year

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Middle response

Band 4.03.0/5 rubric

To: landlord.jones@rentalsolutions.com
Subject: Lease Renewal Inquiry

Dear land lord, I am Alex Smith writing to renew my lease as a tenant. I would like to know is that possible that I could extend my lease agreement for additional one year. Furthermore, tell me that will it be on the current rental amount or there will be any change in that and I have to deposit more amount. I would also like to know about the upcoming maintenance and upgradation schedule for the coming year so I could make necessary arrangement for that specific timr period. I would greatly appreciate assistance you could provide. Sincerely, [name withheld]

What worked

Clear purpose
Inquiry about rent changes
Request for maintenance information

What cost points

Grammatical errors
Inconsistent tone

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To: landlord.jones@rentalsolutions.com
Subject: Lease Renewal Inquiry

Dear Mr. Jones, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to inquire if it be possible I could renew my lease for another year. I would greatly appreciate it if you could inform me, if there are any changes to the current rent amount. In addition, I would also ask if you could tell me, if there are any maintenance updates, that may be scheduled for the upcoming year. So I can prepare mine. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to your response. Sincerely, [name withheld]

What worked

Clear Purpose
Polite Tone
Direct Inquiry

What cost points

Grammatical Errors
Sentence Structure

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To: landlord.jones@rentalsolutions.com
Subject: Lease Renewal Inquiry

I am writing this email regarding my lease, which is going to expire on June 30. I would like to inform you that I have really enjoyed living in this apartment. Therefore, I would like to talk with you to renew my contract for next year. I am relly interested in staying here. Also, I would like to ask you for any changes to the rent amount, that is my main concern. Finally, I would like to ask you for more revelant information such as maintenance, new schedules for the upcoming year. Thank you so much for your time and dedication. It would be appreciated any answer. Best regards [name withheld]